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Desire Scheepers
Blame it on the rain



Blurb:
It all happened because of the rain. Did Sarah finally meet her match in the rain?


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dpstscheepers4
Date: September 23rd 2009
Language: English
Pages: 12
Clicks: 73

BXID: dpstscheepers4_1253621071.8031558990



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symackay
good ending
There was a good flow in the writing and suspense in this piece. I liked the ending.
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dpstscheepers4
Thank you! It really means a lot to me!
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On October 3rd 2009
deeplymoved
A very moving story, indeed. I really liked the ending. Good Job. ANd Good luck with the contest. :)
On October 3rd 2009 | Answer
dpstscheepers4
Thank you for your support. It really means a lot to me.


On October 3rd 2009 | Answer
donnamyoung
Very exciting. Good read. Thanks
Very exciting. Good read. I voted for you. Thanks
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dpstscheepers4
Thank you for your feedback. I am still new at writing, so I appreciate any valuable pointers that are given to me. I hope you find the story good reading as a whole, except for the end.

Desire
On September 30th 2009 | Answer
nisamsuzi
ending
The ending finishes too fast. Add some more info about their relationship.


On September 29th 2009 | Answer
dpstscheepers4
Thank you for the feedback. This is only the second story that I have written, so I appreciate any guidance I get. I hope I will improve in time.

Desire
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marionottaway
Great story but if I were a thriller buff, I would probably go for the expectation being fulfilled...her death. The story reads like the intro to a murder mystery Thriller which you should seriously consider revising away from a tale of romance...unless you made the romantic chivalry of the man as a prelude to a gentleman serial killer.
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On September 25th 2009
dpstscheepers4
This was my second story that...

This was my second story that I submitted. I have never really written anything else, so thank you very much for your wonderful words.

Desire
On September 25th 2009 | Answer
constantine.eternal
I very much enjoyed the pleasantry in this writing at the end. It came as a nice surprise to the gripping and intense chase that led up to it. You have my vote. I liked it alot, and i look forward to reading anything else you write. Keem them coming dear.
j.sin
:)
On September 25th 2009 | Answer
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