Your use of language is an interesting juxtaposition of where the character is placed at the beginning of your story.
The journeyer is a complex character walled into himself, afraid to show vulnerability, compelling but not necessarily likeable!
Your characterisation shows maturity and depth unusual in such a young writer.
Good luck in the competition.
I am sorry but after reading the first 6 pages of your book, I was dissappointed with the sentence structure, the wirdiness, mis-use of words (to for too) and other grammar mistakes, I gave up. I do not mean to be hateful, rather to be truthful and it is not my intent to hurt you in any manner.