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The end to a particular journey. Comments (criticisms especially) welcome.

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A good story! It held my attention easily and conveyed emotion nicely. As for the technical aspects, spit and polish comes with time. You've the beginings og a great writing career! Good Luck!

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Benjamin - I liked your story of truth because it felt that you have been there.

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susanbowes (aka: Forcechild)

I find your story had a good beginning, but I soon found myself as lost as this traveler sounded. It would have been a very good tale if a point was made and/or some conclusion. It was a very good attempt though. Keep at it. You appear to be very talented.

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Your use of language is an interesting juxtaposition of where the character is placed at the beginning of your story.

The journeyer is a complex character walled into himself, afraid to show vulnerability, compelling but not necessarily likeable!

Your characterisation shows maturity and depth unusual in such a young writer.

Good luck in the competition.

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I am sorry but after reading the first 6 pages of your book, I was dissappointed with the sentence structure, the wirdiness, mis-use of words (to for too) and other grammar mistakes, I gave up. I do not mean to be hateful, rather to be truthful and it is not my intent to hurt you in any manner.

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degustibus non disputandum est

i thank you for pointing out that typo, though since you were not specific with your other complaints I'm not really sure what to look for (I re-read the story looking for word misuse and grammar mistakes, but didn't see any). Other than that, I'm... Show more

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thank you for pointing that out - though I believe "soporific" is used correctly, if awkwardly. in my haste to finish this, I didn't really look it over at all, so I appreciate you catching that

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