BookRix

i enjoyed that it made me chuckle

Of all that I've read so far, this one has real potential. For a style like this, you'll need to work more on your "delivery"... just how you choose to deliver your punchlines. They're really pretty good right now, but they *can* be better. I *did* enjoy this. Thanks!
-Stormm

Thank you for participating in our short
story writing contest "Family Stories".

The Librarian