Omg, I think my heart stopped for a moment, frozen in time. I remember the day my son got on the school bus, and kissed me to reassure me that he would be fine and ran onto the bus, as if he was ready for the world. He is still just like that, ready to run into the world while I hesitate and contemplate on if I can let go of his hand.
I really enjoyed the flow of your short story. I could feel the emotion of a mother accepting a rite of passage into the world. Your writing engulfed my senses while placing me in a position to observe the human element. I anticipated the ending although I still yearned for more. Your short story really made my day!! Be blessed, Danny....
The first couple paragraphs I couldn't tell which 'tense' the story was supposed to be set in... it threw me off for a bit.
Nevertheless, I was not expecting this surprise ending! Of course the 8am wake up was a hint, but I was thinking this son to be much older. Like college age.
So the element of surprise was used well. The last sentence almost made me laugh ;)
A great story. It read almost like a poem.
This was a fun read :)