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Eternal Diamond Eyes
Kung Fu Chronicles...

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Kung Fu, tiger, sword, ghost
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robbedbygreed

This is an intriguing piece. A great hook, really :)

However, I did wish you'd added a little more umph! to it... if you get my meaning. Unfortunately, the whole thing felt like a list!

Yikes!

If you beef it up, as in add some kind of flowery language in select places, give your reads a glimpse into the characters mind, if only briefly, and/or give me just a little bit of the background of the scene, I think this could be... Show more

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