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Bright Lights

UNBELIEVABLE [5] By:
Bright Lights
Comment if you like the story, I will update as soon as I get some feedback. Thanks!

Keywords: 
vampire, fairy, dust, horror, teen
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lazarus67

I'm not into horror stories, but I had to read it. An excellent start. I hope you will not leave it at that.
Laz

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Rgabel

Like all good writers, you have the beginnings of a good story. There is definitely tension, building the readers curiosity, and action.

It's like riding a bicycle. You start out wobbly and get better. Keep writing, a lot! Let your reader figure out some things, don't explain everything. I can see you have a writer's mind, a natural story teller.

You have repeated a paragraph right before you introduce us to the creature.... Show more

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