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Before the Storm

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Before the Storm
The turmoil of emotions, the threat of their storm.

Keywords: 
Short Stories, Emotion, Love
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girlinglasses89

You are not the first person to tell me I need to break my paragraphs up more, but I really can't find a rhythm for it. I need to keep trying. I can never quite tell when I should break. Any suggestions?

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rebekahjennings

Hi Girlinglasses,

Now reading your second piece. First thing I wanted to say was the piece would be more inviting to the reader if it were broken up into reading chunks (paragraphs). For example the sentence ...and she stood; alone; tired... this would work so well in a paragraph all on its own. I'm not sure on the metaphor 'a kissing betrayal', it sounds lovely but the meaning is maybe a bit too obscure? You've mentioned 'a... Show more

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cb.cooper

Before the storm, during the storm and after the storm- I loved every word. Well done!

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