So I'm back. If any of my previous readers see this, please know that there have been a few changes. I have deleted part of the story you have read. I have divided the rest into a couple of chapters and a prologue as well improved on the last part. Lyla will still fall for Rhys and I have more twist and turns to add to the story. Please give it another read and leave your comments below. Thanks.
Thank you for your constructive criticism and confidence boosting comments I hope to be posting part 2 soon.
It definitely needs more work, especially toward the end, but the story and the voice are amazing. Without a doubt you have the gift.
I LOVED THE STORY WISH IT WAS LONGER.
The book is longer I just haven't been able to install the rest of part 1 or finish part 2. Thanks to all the scandal I wasn't sure I had any fans left. Not many people apreciate the arts anymore.
It's a pen name nothing more. Those who write understand that. You are clearly not a writer and do not respect the arts. Delete your account you have no reason to be on in the first place. Other than to cause trouble.
fantastic! sounds like it'll make a great book someday!
It's a work in progress and unfinished. I am taking all of your advice in stride and incorpraring some in it as I go along.
Good story/ Wish it were longer. Possibly needed a little more on character development.
This was an original idea./joeparente
Thank you so much. I never thought my hobby would become something more. If anyone else has a comment please feel free. I can't wait to hear what you have to say.
Sincerely,
Alice
So I am thinking about changing Lyla's first name and Devin's last name.