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At the Bus Station

User: jacki137
At the Bus Station
You can only tell people so many times before you just have to show them.

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Hi Jack,

As usual you never fail to please and this is just one more notch in your belt of fantastic flash fiction. Excellent story - short and not so sweet. May I offer one suggestion? Use the word "overpowering" rather than "overbearing" -- that's it! Everything else was perfection.

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I am beginning to love flash fiction, especially yours. Your description of the bus station is so right on that I could see the gum stuck to his shoe. I could see your character at the end as he spoke to his friend, and could imagine him winking.

I had no idea what was coming great twist.

This was a pleasure to read.

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Jack, you seem to have an endless imagination. Another great story with a twist that brings a smile.

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Always a great twist

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Jack, your flash fictions never fail to make me smile. Excellent writing combined with a masterful twist. Always a great job!

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Voted...just kidding. But I would have if it was in a contest.

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