John, I enjoyed reading your book of poetry. I felt the mood of sadness and fear of loss through all you poems.
For constructive critique I think Rebekah Jennings is better at it than I wouls be. Did you paint some of those images? Did you paint the "uninvited" and the "stranger"?
I picked your book as one of my Favourites. I'm going to read your other books. Good work.
Jack
Thank you for reading the poems, and feed back. I like knowing what corrections are needed. Your approach is more than welcome.
I don't mind that they seem as if they could be Rap songs. I think some Rap songs have a close relationship to poetry.
I had forgotten how much I like writing poetry. It had been over 10 years since I had wrote anything in the way of poems, until I joined BookRix.
Hi John,
I love the title and book cover.
Suicide: I really liked this. Great word play.
Paranoid Fantasy: I love this one. You've captured so many of the constituents of paranoia. (Pg 9 last line, to should be too.)
Wicked kid: Reminds me of EMinEm. Lol...
The Stranger: Very clever, and the picture is perfectly scary.
Uninvited: (Pg 17 Creak, should be creek?? If its a place to meet??) You could get rid of 'up' and it'd still work... Show more