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Seen the Lights Go Out on Broadway

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User: kcoach
Seen the Lights Go Out on Broadway
This is a short story I wrote last year.

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rebekahjennings

Hi Kevin,

You have provided a sensory details at the opening of the story that interested me, it helped set the tone of your story.

I think your story would benefit from breaking it up more i.e.: smaller paragraphs and spacing between paragraphs, you readers are more likely to enjoy the experience and concentration is improved.

A couple of things to mention, though not exhaustive.

Pg 5 ...mom did not have the instant attraction... Show more

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