Oh come on, paragraphs at least for the narration. Surely you take time to breath so that's a good point for a new paragraph. What you have here is a block of letters or at best a block of words. Imaginative words, mind you but readers won't take the time to sort out your meaning, they simply won't read it. You have to have structure or it won't sell. Might as well do it the right way and get used to doing it that way.
"IT" Was All She Wanted.Part 1
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