I'm so glad this story had a happy ending. 3 of them. I was surprised because I thought he was a bum. I was afraid of where the story seemed to be going. I liked the first ending the best. I really liked your poetic description of everything in the alley. Especially the snow covering everything and making it look clean and white. This is a wonderful story.
Your story is delightful and wonderful for a child of any age to read. When I started reading I supposed that Theodore was a bum living in the alley and dining like so many do these days from the restaurant dumpsters. Looking back over the story I saw where you said he had been thrown out, and that should have been my first clue that you were not talking about a person. The ending was a surprise, and I chose the first ending.... Show more
Your story is delightful and wonderful for a child of any age to read. When I started reading I supposed that Theodore was a bum living in the alley and dining like so many do these days from the restaurant dumpsters. Looking back over the story I saw where you said he had been thrown out, and that should have been my first clue that you were not talking about a person. The ending was a surprise, and I chose the first ending. It wasn’t clear how long Theodore sat there in the alley before Alexandra found him, but I assumed they had just left. I questioned if the restaurant would throw him out or would they put him in the lost and found?
Alternate ending#2 seemed a little unbelievable. I don’t care how cute he was he was with all the trash, and the mother (in us females) couldn’t be sure what kind of germs he might harbor. Since I go to all kinds of thrift stores there are certain items I will not buy, and children’s soft toys are among them. I am not a germophobe even the people who work in these stores wear gloves, lol. If I find it at a garage sale, that’s a different thing. I can see the homes and the people selling them, and they would go in a washer with the hottest water when I got it home. On page 8 As they passed the lane behind the row of restaurants, (I added the s), Sam, her Schnauzer ( I think I would capitalize the breed name) took off and ran behind the pile(here can you use line or row ) of trash cans.
Alternate ending #3 Joe was doing his rounds that evening, as he had being (been) doing for the last several years around the same time every night. There was a lot (I think I would choose to use a lot since you use lots again in the next sentence) of food to be found behind the fine bistros. Here I go again, but how many shelters would accept a teddy bear from a bum? Neither one of them would be very presentable. I did like the idea it was sweet of him to think of the shelter and the children missing their toys.
Now that I said all of that I always enjoy reading your stories and poetry. I only found a few minor spelling errors that seem to slip by all of us. I would recommend your story to others. Good job.
This was beautifully written. I loved all alternate endings but my favorite one had to be the first one. Something forgotten is found and feels loved once again.
Though happy endings can be seen as wishful thinking at times, I think this happy ending had a sense of realism which made it so much more fun to read.