This was a very cute and entertaining story! I loved Zeke and Zak, they were very funny characters. You did a great job in writing it and I'm sure many kids would love a story like this. I'm a kid at heart so I know I loved it :D
This is absolutely adorable, and continues to make me giggle - what a great story! Any child who gets this read to him or her will be delighted, and probably remember it forever. Awesomeness with wings! "D
These two munchkins deserve more exposure, Lenora. What a delightful concept. In some instances the sentence structure may be a bit complex but I think that is how we learn. I don't know as I would change it much, IMHO. My greats would love it.