sooo grown-up for 17. you are a very talented writer. dark dark thoughts, is your world that bleak? are you just a prodigy who is able to go where a lost soul can be found? I see wonderous things for you in the future. please try writing a few short stories,I'd like to see where you could go with it. I'm sure E.A.Poe went to some of the same places,look what it did for him. want to hear from you soon!!
I see alot of angst here. And I want to commend you on the effort to express that. Expressing sorrow or pain can be difficult, and even more difficult to get others to understand.
However I can see the attempt and your potential to express effectively. Your style is rough, but a little polishing should do the trick. Because of that, I will favorite this.