I would appreciate it if you are a bit easier on mis.loveless, after all she is 12. I am not being mean, but please be nicer to the younger ones, a 12 year old's heart can be broken worse than a 16 year old's heart. Its not a competition to write, if thats the way she wants HER story to look then thats how it is going to look. She is a young girl, yeah your feed back does count, but be nicer about it PLEASE.
needs alot of work....i think u need 2 improve on ur story tellin, i got confused alot by u just jumpy around the place....u need 2 ease in2 the story n fully explain, mke the reader feel a connection wit the characters, ther love, Stella's hate...uno really make us wanna read more. i think if u go over it n re ryt it u can mke this story amazin !!!!