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Right In Two

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Right In Two
Braeden is servant in Hell's Army called forth to spy on the enemy before a major battle. Ambitious to advance himself he eagerly accepts and heads out; what he finds will change him forever.

Keywords: 
Heaven, Hell, Angels, Demons, Drama
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S.P. Johnson Jr.

I like the concepts you're working with here, and that you have the imagination to visualize a war on a transcendent level. This is well-written. Good job.

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gooduklady

Plot-wise, this is original and quite unique, although somewhat difficult to follow at times. It probably needs re-reading a couple of times to really get your message.

Construction-wise, too many semi-colons where commas would have done just as well. Always follow dialogue with a comma rather than a period. No stand alone "He saids" please. Thoughts are more easily recognized if put in italics, but that is just my own... Show more

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epoch1

Well written and well crafted fantasy

Big fantasy in a small story.

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sunaynaprasad

You have a good story going on. However, I'd suggest making the thoughts in italics rather than in quotes, so it's not confusing to the reader.

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