This was very creative! I could imagine the breakfast characters jumping off their paper labels. It was so real. Snap, Crackle, and Pop were my favorite ;) Well done.
However, the story was a tad hard to follow I think it was because of the punctuation, which was lacking and rarely seen (that I remember). I think it would do you well to go back and fix all that up so that not only the words can be comprehended, but the actual... Show more
You write well, and Snap, Crackle and Pop and the cast of characters kept me hopping throughout!
I'm glad you liked it! I've submitted it to the Flash Fiction contest. I don't expect to win anything since it's not as deep and dark as the other submissions but I figured maybe the change will be refreshing and I'll have a snowball's chance in hell LOL
Anyway, I'm loving the excerpt from your latest book and can't wait to read more:)
I don't think you missed a single grain in this delightful little romp over the breakfast table:)
Nice; imaginative to the max!