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Chameleon

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Chameleon
Louise has a secret.

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bharris

This was a great story with great metaphorical content. I thought the family dynamic was a great achievment, which is never an easy subject to write. Good job!

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parvina

i read almost all books, but u, afzal shauq and olfa are the best and true ones, good to u

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lbolden.books

Hi Rebekah,
I liked the metaphor viewing life through the eyes of the character’s glasses. I think it took on a new perspective, but it seemingly lost some passion in the middle of the book. I enjoyed your voice and I like how gently you revealed the unpleasantness of domestic violent and the impact it could have on a person who loves them so much. Thanks for a different writer’s edge…Keep up the great creativity.

Linda B

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mardijuel

I liked the whole idea with the glasses metaphor. Very unique but very fitting at the same time. The ending was sad... Reminds me of one of those movies where everyones lives link up in a movie some how... like crash...

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preethi

I liked your story. I vote your book. Thanks for letting me read and comment. All the best!

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dholm1

Hi Rebekah. I've been trying to take a look at the stories in this family contest and got very caught up in the beginning of yours. I usually pick what I am or am not going to read on the first couple of paragraphs, so well done for catching my attention. I thought the metaphor with the glasses was brilliant, though it did kind of wavor toward the end. It is only my opinion, but what I felt was you were going along telling... Show more

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rebekahjennings

Hi Denna,

Thanks for taking the time to read my work 'Chameleon'.

Your constructive feedback as given me some concrete examples to improve my work and I just think that is wonderful.

I am beginning a writing course in two weeks. I actually started it several years ago part time... Show more

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rebekahjennings

Message: Hi Rebekah,
I had a little time this afternoon, so I read back through 'Chameleon'. Apart from the fact that I think you're a very astute writer, I also think your prose is very good. There is not much to mention in terms of anything you're doing which jumps out at me, except the word 'now'.
In most places imho you could just take it out and it wouldn't make any difference to the story.
Have a look at page 2 - 3rd line... Show more

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scottkelly

Good read, very emotional. A little too much explanation of the 'glasses' metaphor; I feel it could be worked in a little more naturally in some places. It is not such a completely original metaphor that the groundwork doesn't already exist for it.

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drkathy2

The use of the glasses for people's perspective is great. Your use of descriptive detail makes you "see" the scene. Great detail.
kathy

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alysa.s.

A very insightful story and an interesting way of looking at people's views on the world.

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