I echo Stephanie's comments. I applaud you for beginning what might very well be a terrific story Shellanda. Alas, for this contest it doesn't have 30 entries :( Hurry...you have time...finish it! Perhaps begin, Dear diary...:)
You may want to look at the perquisites for the contest entries. I am unable to vote because this should be in diary form with 30 entries. Would like to see the rest when you are done. Perhaps you could work on the grammar and use of caps. Good luck sweetie.