Liked it! <3 Though I do have some critiques:
You spelled heart wrong(you spelled it hart) at the end of the first stanza.
I love that you choose free verse and not the typical Shakespearean couplet.
However, I think the meaning being the poem seems a bit shallow. I can't really feel the feeling your trying to convey. That's just my opinion.
Good job! You have talent :)
I was intrigued by your message in the post, and so I opened your book.
I agree with kbaxter...you have talent. There are a few spelling errors, and I wonder...could you sing these lines? I mean, write music to them?
I've never written lyrics, but yours really show a lot of seriously good emotion. Do keep writing. Good job:)