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judycolella

A quick note: "Try how each one feels like" - page 17. The correct form is either "Try what each one feels like" or "Try how each one feels." The "like" at the end of the sentence the way it stands is redundant.

Okay. That's all that needs to be tweaked. The rest is magnificent.

Too many people think that if you can just rhyme words at the end of each line, you've written poetry. You, however, have grasped its heart and are... Show more

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Yolla

Thank youu, Thank you, Thank you!
This means so much to me:")
I'll edit the content right away, thanks for the note :")

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judycolella

Good second chapter that gives a satisfying follow-up to the first. Some punctuation and grammatical boo-boos but nothing difficult to fix. When it's all done, be sure to give it a thorough, deep edit and you'll have something incredible that many will enjoy reading. Great stuff, great insights, great work!

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Yolla

thank you, thank you!
that really means a lot, I'll make sure to take your remarks into consideration ! :D

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Emo Bitch Is Here

OMFG That was fucking amazing like I don't know what else to say other than say I didn't get this feelings until 3 days ago when I started dating my boyfriend Matthew

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Yolla

Glad you liked it :')

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♥ davebccanada ♥

You have a refreshing style that is unusual and pleasing. It is even captured in your cover. Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing.

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Yolla

Thank you so much for your words! :")
It does really mean a lot.

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lazarus67

Nice heartfelt discription of one's love and loss. This is almost like a diary. Keep it going.
A couple of small errors...nothing to worry about.
And...your second letter starts out in the present tense, then continues in the past.
Again...easily fixed.
Good work.
Laz

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Yolla

Thank you !
This will be taken into consideration for sure :D

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felixthecat

This sounds so much like a really fine Prologue. You have a way with words that's extremely pleasing. Hope to read more as you write.

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Yolla

Thank you!
This really means a lot to me :D